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FEBRUARY 16th
, 2012 www.latimes.com
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Dramatic Murders in L.A
Léa
Conrath, Hannah Fleck, Carla Witt, Margo Ajazi & Anastasia Gedda
reporting fom L.A Beach.
A violent conflict erupted
between the Montague and the Capulet families in Los Angeles last
night.
Summary: 2 dead on each side and
one of the murderers is still on the run.
'''I
heard the terrific sound of a gun firing. Then blood...blood
everywhere ,''
told us nervously a witness.
Last afternoon on a Los Angeles
beach and while kids were swimming and eating their ice-creams,
Tybalt, Lady Capulet's nephew, deliberately opened fire on young
Romeo. Rumours spread all around the city that Romeo got married last
Sunday with Juliet Capulet. According to a trusty source, this was
the beginning of the feud of yesterday but several members of each
family still deny this version of the story.
We
are about to conclude that all of this bloodshed started by a
misunderstanding: ''
Tybalt started the fight before he was killed by Romeo. Romeo spoke
to Tybalt politely and told him how silly this argument was. He
mentionned that you would not approve of the fight, he said all of
this gently and calmly, kneeling down out of respect. But he could
not make peace with Tybalt, who was in an angry mood and wouldn't
listen to talk about peace. Tybalt and Mercutio began to fight each
other fiercely, lunging at one another and dodging each other's
blows. Romeo cried out, ''Stop, my friends. Break it up.''. Then he
jumped in between them and forced them to put their swords down. But
Tybalt reached under Romeo's arm and thrust his sword into brave
Mercutio. Then Tybalt fled the scene.'' ,
stuttered anxiously Benvolio Montague.
Our journal will confirm this
version accords with the report of the forensic scientists.
A few hours later, the body of
Tybalt Capulet was found, riddled with five bullets.
Peter,
the servant of the Capulets, reported how the members of the family
were devasted: ''Lady
Capulet is definitely shocked by her nephew's death, taht's why I
came to speack for her. She wants revenge at the Montagues and that
justice must be done. Nevertheless, Mister Capulet told me that he
will soon deliver you more information on that subject. As a close
member of the Capulets, I think that this murder should be expressly
recognised.''
The assassin's murder weapon was
dicovered next to the dead body of Tybalt. The investigators informed
us that they well and truly found the fingerprints of the presumed
suspect: Romeo Montague.
Prince
Escalus who is in charge of the investigation expressed: ''He
should be charged and punished using strictly lawful methods. After
all, he benefits from the right of presumption of innocence and
access to a legal representant. In other words, he will be either
condemned or released. Now that I interviewed some witnesses, I can
say it out loud: Romeo is banished from Verona!''
''Certain
clues intend to reinforce the guilt of Romeo. However, the n°1
suspect is still on the run''
, specified our interlocutor.
But where has he run to? We
will investigate for you, readers.
During this rough period, we
came to listen one of the most unbiased and pacific figure of this
city and a close friend for both families: Friar Lawrence.
''In
a time of riots and social protests, the police is taking the
important responsability of reducing violence in Los Angeles. That
means that the use of pressure is necessary during interviews. I hope
Romeo will soon give up and cooperate with the police officers. I can
say that he certainly murdered Tybalt without knowing what he was
doing: he was blinded by his youth. He wanted revenge and as we know,
revenge can bring you do stupid things. May God welcome Mercutio and
Tybalt, our two loved friends, to the redemption of love. Their souls
can now rest in peace.''
Our article finishes on these
beautiful and peaceful words: may Romeo hear is council and go
himself to the police.
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