Los Angeles Times
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Murder on Verona beach
When it's hot outside, poeople get angry and hot-blooded. The smallest thing, you get angry. And when you're in the mood to get angry, you find something to get angry about.
Indeed today, February 2nd February, there was a fight and someone died.
« Tybalt hurt Mercutio and it was too late to save him. Romeo was so angry he started screaming. « He's alive and victorious, and Mercutio's dead » . He was fed up of mercy and consideration. And it is his rage that guide his actions... He wanted neither him nor Tybalt to die and go up to Heaven with Mercutio. » says Benvolio.Around ten o'clock in the evening on Verona Beach, Tybalt Capulet was killed. Tybalt was « quite agressive and quick to draw his sword » according to Benvolio. But why and how Tybalt did die ?
Apparently Romeo only wanted to save Mercutio's soul, Benvolio feels bad for Romeo because he is the one who ran into Tybalt, who was angry about the Montagues crashing his family party the other night,
According to Prince Escalus « Romeo strolled into the middle of a situation, and as things escalated, Tybalt killed Mercutio, Stricken by grief, Romeo promptly challenged Tybalt to a duel and killed him ». Romeo, then, ran away before all of Verona showed up.The prince rules « Romeo won't be killed, but banished from Verona ».
But the Nurse gives an interesting detail, Friar Lawrence married Romeo Montague and Juliet Capulet!
Son and daughter of two enemy families of Verona. This all puts damper on the new marriage. But why did they marry ?
« This marriage may be lucky enough to turn the hatred between the families into pure love. » says Friar Lawrence.
« I was first afraid that he would lead her into a fool's paradise, it would be an outrageous crime because the girl is so young. But Romeo has a good heart, and I can't imagine him killing anyone without a good reason. Lord, Lord, she was a happy woman. » explained, confidentially, Juliet's nurse.
The nurse and Friar Lawrence were the only people involved in the organisation of this marriage, afraid of the families' reaction and what they would put in place to avoid this union.
13/20
RépondreSupprimerYour grammar is not always correct, but it is understandable. As well as your grammar, your expression sometimes seemed simple, as if your sentences were learned by heart.
On the other side, your article gives us lots of information and you took nice quotations from the play (Benvolio, The Nurse ...)
L: 4
E: 2.5
G: 3
O: 3.5
Margo Ajazi
Carla Witt
The article was well done, the marriage organisation was well presented considering both friar laurence and the nurse. The speech of the characters were well presented. Indeed, there was too much dialogue, most of the paragraphs were just like a summary of the story, there was too much angryness and words repetitions
RépondreSupprimerL:3.5
E:4.5
G:3.5
O:4
Total:15.5 Good Job
Nasos and Ifeoma
We think that this article was made to be acted : it's very living! But there are quite a few grammar and expression mistakes and it's a real pity!
RépondreSupprimerHowever it remains complete: the content is good and the point of view is interesting!
L: 3.5
E: 3,25
G: 3
O: 4,25
= 14
Rebecca, Romy and Carmen.
content:4.5 Globaly the content iss very good in it's self. It's not too long so we don't get bored and we can read it with no problem.
RépondreSupprimergrammar:4.5/5 You did not make many grammar mistakes and that is good .
orginisataion:5/5 The article is very well organized, it's logical and understandable.
expression:3/5 You used a lot of good expressions to not repeat the same words over and over again and that was good. But sometimes you some expressions were not appropriated to the sentence.
17/20
Okenna!